Unit 19 learning aim C: Drafted Script

 

Draft script

My finished 

Class Feedback

My teachers feedback

According to the teachers feedback and the students feedback, my script definitely needs some adjustments. Particularly conversations with the character Amelia and Susan (the two female characters). I also need to make sure the motives of the antagonist are outlined from the start of the script and also make sure to hook the audience in as soon as possible. Since I have written a lot of words it is going to be difficult to cut down the amount of words (2201) to 800. However, I can definitely see that adjustments need to be made. I will do them in my finally finished script.